Thursday, July 14, 2011

abu_saud Ahmad

First, he was looking food and cut the bread with scissors. Second,he ate frish fish. Third,he cut cheese. Last,he useed hot water bottle for tee. Finally, anther friend gave him sandwich cheese.

1 comment:

NR said...

Good work. You used the transition words well. Here are some changes for the next draft:
--Topic sentence: What is the main idea and controlling idea of the paragraph?
--I'm confused by the verb "was looking." Do you mean "cooking"?
--Please double-check your spelling!
--After each punctuation, put one space.
--Remember to put the adjective first: cheese sandwich