Thursday, June 30, 2011

Last year

  
     In China ,one day I with my family together watched Tv  last year.Suddenly I want with my

mother went to travel. Next we bought a car and we driverd car to  BEI JING. You knew, I

enjoyed travel.


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1 comment:

NR said...

Good work!

Here are some changes:
--my family and I
--I wanted to travel with my mother

What's the past tense of "drive"?
Why is Beijing all in capital letters?
In the expression, "you know" don't change this to past tense.

July 2, 2011 at 10:37 AM

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