Mr,Bean is a funny person.
He wanted to make a sandwich , but he failed in making it, becouse he don,t knew to make it.
If he knew to make it verry strange, but he is a well knewn comedian, so verry funny man.
He wanted to make a sandwich , but he failed in making it, becouse he don,t knew to make it.
If he knew to make it verry strange, but he is a well knewn comedian, so verry funny man.
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Good work. You have some good details in your paragraph. In the next draft, try to add some transition words. Here are some other changes to make:
--Topic sentence: Put the first two sentences together to show the main idea and controlling idea.
--Second sentence: Start with "He failed..."
--Remember to use the past tense in the helping verb:
He didn't know how...
--Add more examples to show how he tried to make the sandwich.
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