Mr, Bean saw a man sitting next to him and he eat his sandwich . Then Mr, Bean out a bread from his pocket and broken it in to pieces with scissors. Also he out from his pocket a piece of butter. Mr. Bean used his card to wipe the bread with the butter. After that he Washed the lettuce and put it in his sock. Then he got out two fish from the bottle and hit them in the chair. He extend a piece of cloth ,then he put some spices in the cloth and beat it by his shoe . Mr. Bean made sandwich, but he lost it .
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Good work. I like the details and transition words you used in the paragraph. Here are some changes for the next draft:
--Topic sentence: Be careful about the pronoun "he" because it could mean Mr. Bean or the man next to him!
--"Broken" is the past participle. What is the past tense?
--"Out" is not a verb! Do you mean: took out some bread?
--Type one space after each punctuation mark.
--What is the past tense of "extend"?
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